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Kickoff written by Ashmlin11 / Follow-up written by Ashmlin11

Bottomless pit

He is trapped. Will he get out?

I blinked, and peered as hard as I could, trying to focus on the small red dots. It looked close, and if it was close, and its eyes were small, it had to be small. I thought it must have been a rabbit or a rat. Then a growl came from that direction.

I felt my heart jump and my eyes widen in terror. I caught my breath as the eyes slowly came closer. I hoped this beast wasn't hungry, because I was not ready to be eaten.

Moving slowly, I backed away from the monster in the dark. This couldn't be real. This was a campfire story that children told each other. This was not real. The eyes still approached, and I was stuck in reverse.

I didn't want to take my eyes off it. I knew it could see me, but I couldn't see it, not its full figure anyway.
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I wondered how big it could be, how big its mouth could be. My knees were getting sore and I could feel the rocks cutting into them. I could tell my hands were already a bloody mess from the sting. Maybe that was it. Could it smell the blood?

Still backing up, my foot hit something solid. A mass wrapped around my ankle. I almost screamed, but I heard a "shhhh" behind me.

Eyes still on the red dots, I whispered into the darkness. "Hello?"

"Don't move." Said the voice behind me.

"Who are you?" I asked.

"Stop talking."

"What is that?"

"I said..."

The voice was cut off by the red eyes which roared like a dragon. I felt a pull on my pants and heard the voice instruct me to follow it.

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